There’s a real sharpness to your prose here that perfectly mirrors the title. Each sentence feels like a small piece of a larger puzzle. I love how you lean into the discomfort of the 'cracks' rather than trying to smooth them over.
I really like your use of imagery; it draws the reader in. I did notice a few pronoun shifts that can be a little confusing at times. If you anchor them more clearly, maybe with a name or consistent focal point, the piece could become even more compelling.
Really solid story telling! Creepy!
Thank you so much 🤍
Incredible work my friend. I feel like you and I will get along nicely.
We just might… glad you enjoyed it🤍
There’s a real sharpness to your prose here that perfectly mirrors the title. Each sentence feels like a small piece of a larger puzzle. I love how you lean into the discomfort of the 'cracks' rather than trying to smooth them over.
Thanks for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed it🤍
Your use of sensory details creates a deeply unsettling atmosphere that perfectly mirrors Alex's psychological fracture.
Great to have your voice here on Substack. Subscribed and look forward to reading more. I would love you to do the same, if my writing resonates.
Thank you🤍 I'm glad you liked it.
I really like your use of imagery; it draws the reader in. I did notice a few pronoun shifts that can be a little confusing at times. If you anchor them more clearly, maybe with a name or consistent focal point, the piece could become even more compelling.
This was such a fantastic short story. The way you describe things… so eerie. Amazing work.
Thank you very much!